By Dan Seavers
I’m writing to say I wasn’t a fan of your most recent story.
It didn’t make any sense to me, as it jumped into the situation way too quickly.
I wish you’d described the protagonist earlier. As a young male with light brown hair, I like a hero I can associate with.
The tone was off, as it felt more of an affront to the reader.
And worst of all was the ending. Just as I felt it was building to something, it ended. I found it very incomplete, almost unfinished.
I definitely won’t be reading anything like…
©Dan Seavers 2016